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David F. has this to say about the first draft of his piece:
       Faulkner. I picked the description
of a forest fire and tried to use it in the suggestive, metaphoric style
of Faulkner in "The Old Man." There
is no attempt here to work out a story or much of a structure
beyond the description itself, using a Faulknerian, omniscient, third-person
voice where the narrator is given permission to do just about
anything. Play with the metaphor, stay focused. No more than a
paragraph.
So he went on. Pausing to catch his breath only because the climb was
steep along the side of a thickly covered ridge. His eye knew the
ground, every inch of it though he had never set foot on it before,
knew it in a place of primeval oneness with it never taught him nor
learned in any book of craft nor any lecture nor any old-timer's
experience of it. It made him understand without asking that the
strange white color of the cliffs had nothing to do with roiling
patterns of sky or with the way the sun struck the mountain. When he
turned and looked back against the torn dirty sky, the Continental
Divide was shrouded in huge cotton clumps of smoke, in long,
motionless, gauzy veils hanging brown and yellow, discoloring the sky
from one end of the horizon to the other.  The fire was still behind
him, the main body of it still along the eastern slopes, in the
arroyos and flatlands near the South Fork, the whole area below him a
massive and inert thundercloud like a separate continent sitting on
top of the land, a covering like the atmospheric shroud of a hostile
planet, protective and solid and mysterious--but which, in reality,
was only a single layer of the fire itself that moved in its own
ineluctable way out of whatever smithy of the deep produced it
(sky-tearing dagger of lightning, the mocking inch of a match), many
layered., slow, quick, gentle, violent at the same time, the bellows
roar of it an invisible blistering cataract sucking the air itself
into its mighty vortex, its killing power not just in its peeling
angry reach of flame but in its violent inward and unseen concavity
the inverse whirlpool of a force great enough to drain from lung and
sky its own formation, its own definition, the capacity not to burn
but to explode from the inside out, bowels and bones, ichor and rings
of great trees, roots torn from the ground, the screaming of saplings
boiling in their own hearts.  Then there was the feeding part of it,
slower and easier, that chewed ruminatively and deliberatively, almost
bovine in its mindlessness, taking its cud of wood, homes, square
barns, orchards, whole forests, drooling long liquid streams of slow
flame like saliva leaking from the jaws of still standing
timbers. When he turned back into the forest, towards the edge of the
ridge, where he was going to set the backfire, bolts of flame were
already leaping from tree to tree across the tops of the tall pines,
firebursts from nowhere in the streaming and still ribboned and opened
body of the mountain. 
 
 
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